Happy Dogs (and a cat who thinks it's a dog)

This week's Video of the Week comes from The Writing Book team. It should bring a smile to your face. Watch it and enjoy! Then you might like to try one of these suggested writing prompts:

• A day out - recount the event from a dog's perspective 
• Review the video 
• Describe part of the clip 
• Narrative based on the video 
• Write captions /speech bubbles

Exploding Coke Bottle

Writing Purpose: To Entertain

WALT use our senses to describe

• (see, hear, smell, feel, taste)
• different sentence starters
• some short sentences

Swoosh! I can feel the Coke going up my nose. Jaidyn Russell,

Brayden: Boom! I opened the coke lid, Squirt!, The coke shot right up my nostrils like someone shot a shotgun up my nostrils.

“Pop! Boom! Ouch!” as the coke shot up my nostrils. Tracey L

Elijah. The brown liquid covered my face leaving behind a sticky mess.

Matilda  

OH Coke. I ran to it, he undid the lid and the fizzy coke rocketed out of the bottle up into my nostril.

EZRA MORTON

Ka pow! A gush of coke sprayed into my face! I peeped a look. Splash! Coke went into my eye. “Yeow!” I shouted leaping up, dancing around the room holding my eye!

George    Boom the bottle explodes! It looks like whiskers.

Rosie:  Boom! It felt like I had fizzy whiskers. Then it felt like I had fizzy boogers.

TRAYLAN  Pop! pop! oh no is going to pop!

Jacob BOOM!! The fizzing coke went right up John’s nose.

Crystal = BOOM!  Suddenly I can feel the fizzy spraying up my nose.

Shake! Shake! Shake! Pop! The coke lid flew away and the coke went straight up my nose and everywhere else it looked like cat whiskers. (TAYLOR)

It burst on my face like cat whiskers.

Mary Arkell

Class word bank

JAMES ¬ BOOM!! AGH! The coke fires up at me like a volcano.

Kellyanne: I could taste the fizzed coke in my mouth and I could smell the coke fizzing bubbles.

Boom! The coke give me a big mustache. Liam

Boom!!!! I could see a coke bottle on the table in front of me  then suddenly coke burst out like a firework. By Brooklyn

Kyra  I opened the lid and out it sprayed up my nostrils, and then came out like fireworks.

Maia: Not only would it be a coke rocket, it would be a rocket to space!

I smell coke burning through my nostrils at 102 kilometres an hour. Ben!

NASA: Come on I can do the IMPOSSIBLE.                              

Jared: It shot up like a rocket.

KAPOW! Suddenly coke exploded all over my face and the place.  BY JULIUS MONKEY

Cameron: I unscrewed the lid of the coke bottle. The coke shot out of the bottle.

Imagine if a coke bottle blew up in front of you. Boom! Fizz! (Zach)

As he opened the coke bottle suddenly POP! He went back as he got fright from the lid flying across the room. (Kayla)

I could pull it off still unknowing that it was going to go everywhere. Then it exploded in my face. Yum, but it still hurt.(Madison)

Imaginary Cycling

We are learning about safe cycling. These pictures are not examples of safe cycling! Instead, we are using them to motivate some creative writing. Which one is your favourite? Why?

Sky Rider

My First Training Wheels

Your Turn First

Here are some entertaining sentences:

I get pushed on my way! “AHHHH you idiots!” I scream. Ben

I closed my eyes and found that my tummy was feeling a little sick. It felt as if the food and stuff inside it was floating amongst the gravity. Hemani

‘I want to ride my bike, mum,’ I said. ‘Well... ride off a cliff then,’ she replied. ‘Ok, I will then’. Zach

My tummy feels weird like its got butterflies flying around. Imaan

I waited to go to the toilet.4 minutes later. Hurry up! Hurry up!!! Come out. NOOOOO! Shivom

I hope I don’t fall down and get hurt. Emma

This is awesome! Nikitah J.

“Hey,” I say to Elijah, “Do you want to play? ‘I dare you’.” 5 minutes later... Tyrone

I knew I shouldn't of put the helium in my tyres. But there was 10 bucks on the line. Do you know how many cool things you can buy with 10 bucks? Not many, but still it’s 10 bucks. Elijah

Adrenalin rushing. I've just invented the new  MAGIC flying bike!!! Let’s GO! Zeb

“Ahhhhhhh!" I can't believe what I am going to do! Am I crazy? Nakita

I am getting there, I am trying my best to get there. Tracey

Wow this is amazing but there is one problem, how am I going to get down? Bree

I feel like I am going 100 miles per hour! Not. Hannah

I finally reach the top of the ramp, 1km above the ground, adrenaline was pumping, my heart couldn't stop beating. Inderpreet

So I take some deep breaths and say “hasta la vista, baby” as I push off. Marcus

It’s now or never! Cameron

Simple, Compound and Complex Sentences

Today we used this cute dragon photo to inspire our writing. At first, I pretended I had a new pet.

Personal Dragon Pet

In writing, we are learning more about sentences. Sentences are a group of words that express an idea. They have a subject and a verb.

A simple sentence has one idea.

The little dragon wriggled on my fingers.

A compound sentence has two ideas joined by a conjunction.

The dragon is learning to breathe fire and it has lit a candle.

A complex sentence has two or more parts. One part has the main idea and makes sense by itself. The other parts contain information which builds on the main idea. The extra part does not make sense by itself.

The dragon's nostrils billowed smoke as if it was real.

Watch our Explain Everything which we recorded as we created our sentences.

Dragon Sentences from Kieren Moriarty on Vimeo.

Music: When by Stephen Siebert (Creative Commons)

Wildebeest Writing

Yesterday we used this animated video as a writing prompt.

We discussed ideas about the structure of the story.

There was a lot of direct speech coming through in our writing, so we had a mini-lesson on punctuating direct speech.

The students' writing is very entertaining so far. Many have chosen to completely change the characters. Look out for their presented writing on the student blogs (links on the right).

Pic Lits

           See the full PicLit at PicLits.com

PicLits is a site on our Writing Symbaloo. You get to choose words to form sentences or a poem to match the photo of your choice. There are a lot of photos to choose from.

Here is my example. I chose this photo because I love basketball.

Below I will post links to PicLit posts that students in Room 16 created:

• Joshua
• Teva
• Hannah
• Hemani
• Emma

WALT use our senses effectively to create a story

Success Criteria:

• Really use the senses so the reader can visualise
• Correct sentences 
• Short, sharp sentences to build tension (in parts) 
• Paragraphing groups of sentences
• Beginning, middle and end
• Problem and resolution

Here is our writing prompt, including words that we visualised from the prompt using our senses. I wonder how well we will achieve the criteria of the story.

We are off to a good start! These voice recordings are from various students' first steps to create a story generated from the visual prompt. 

Casey reading from "Branches"

Alexandra reading from "Once Upon A Time"

Parris reading from "Mysterious Tunnel"

Jacob reading from "The Forest Of Gold"

Kharn reading from "Little Blue Riding Hood"

Bianca reading from "The Four Friends"

Jake reading from "The Peaceful Path"

Hannah reading from "The Thing That Is Following Me"