Two Reporters: A Hippy and a Glamour Girl

Walkie talkie persuading by Rosie from Kieren Moriarty on Vimeo.

Have they persuaded you?

Check out Elijah's blog post here.

Walkie Talkie Advertising

Walkie Talkie Advertising from Kieren Moriarty on Vimeo.

Matilda has persuaded her audience!

I want to advertise my new walkie talkie toy before December so parents can buy them in time for Christmas.  I want to do it in the fairest, safest way.  You are my advertiser.  Can you help me decide if I should advertise on the internet or on TV?

WALT write a statement and back it up with evidence

(Success Criteria)

We must remember to:

• Open with a statement about the issue you are addressing
• State your position on the issue
• Give at least three facts that are supported with evidence or examples
• End with a summary- wrap up the main ideas you have been talking about.

Yachting 2014 Part 2

Cameron is in control!

The most exciting thing about optimist yachting was capsizing because you would get really wet. Kayla
Me and Julius went together for the first round we were going good until…. He started screaming and I got a massive fright which caused us to capsize. Mary
Something I was pleased with was that last year I didn't like going yachting that much and this year I went yachting more. Crystal
Something that made me think was which way I should go, in optimist yachting, to catch the wind. Elijah

On Tuesday we went kayaking and we had a race and Traylan and I won the race. George

Today there was a little bit of wind, I went with 3 people and then I went by myself and when you go by yourself you go faster than going with 3 people. Jack

Dear diary. I got hit by the boom really bad because I was bringing a yacht in and the boom swung and hit my head! Jacob

It was so fun - 100% James

The best yachting buddy that I had in yachting was Jack. Traylan

Something I was pleased with was being able to go on a yacht for the first time because I thought I didn't have the courage to. Maia

Me and Jack just about capsized today and it was not funny. Liam

Ok let me get right to the point, the best one was yachting because it was my first time on one and I had been kayaking before. Rosemary

It was so sad because today was our last day of optimist yachting. But the best bit is that I get to do it next year. Kyra

I really enjoyed learning how to yacht because it is very fun & hard. Zach

Yachting 2014 Part 1

Ben and Ezra Sailing Team

"Something I was pleased with was jumping out of a yacht when it was capsizing and getting tipped out of a kayak." Cameron
"Something that made me think was where to go because I didn't want to go into the wind." Tracey
"I really enjoyed the Yachting and Kayaking and I wish I could do it every day of the week!" Taylor

"I went out by myself and kept tipping almost over since I couldn't balance the boat out and I got tangled in the mainsheet." Ben
We set sail out in the deep blue water. "You're a natural Briar," said Traylan steering the boat. Briar
"I was very happy when I went back to shore, I was proud of myself for going out further than I imagined." Matilda
"Something I was pleased with was capsizing a yacht because I have never capsized before." Jaidyn

Māui and his first journey, retold by Kyra

We have been learning about myths and legends. Here is a fantastic retelling of Māui’s first journey by year five student, Kyra.

Māui and his first journey

How do I retell a story in my words?

Step 1 Plan

• Structure  
• Order of events
• Details (senses - dialogue - thoughts - actions - feelings

Introduction	Event 1	Event 2	Event 3	Event 4	Ending
Taranga taught the children how to talk and sing a waiata to Maui while he was in her tummy.They sang him this song “Taku kurapounamu taku motoi kahurangi o taha, o roto, o pae, o waho e...	One day she went on a walk and she could feel a nigly pain. She fell to the ground yelling help.	Maui was born and his mum was really worried and her puku was sore. His mum taranga thought he was dead because he didn't move. Wrapped him in her hair and set him out to sea.	He sailed and then found Tama-nui- ki-te-rangi.	He went to find his mum and brothers but his brothers did not know who he was, Maui showed his brothers his powers and then they believed him.	He saw his mum and she asked him who he was, so  Maui sang the song and  then his mum realised it was him.
Hook	Details	Details	Details	Details	Details
Taranga had four children and was about to have a 5th.	Speech, hear.	Actions, feel, feeling, see.	See.	See, actions.	Speech, see.

Taranga had four children that she had raised on her own and was about to have a 5th. When it was born it will be half man and half god. Taranga taught her four children how talk and sing to Maui well he was still in her tummy. They were all very excited. They would talk to their pepe everyday. They sang to him, "taku kurapounamu taku motoi kahurangi o taha, o roto, o pae, o waho e…” One day Maui Taha asked Taranga, “When we are singing to our pepe, can he hear us?” 

“Yes my son, he can,” replied Taranga. From that day on, they would waiata, haka, and korero to their growing pepe.

One day when Taranga went for a walk on the beach she felt a niggly pain in her tummy. She could tell that Maui was coming. She couldn't walk any further and she felt really weak. She cried out “Help!” But no one could hear her. Then she started to give birth.

Maui was born but he did not move. Taranga accidently thought he was dead. She grabbed a shell and cut the pito, but he still didn't move. She cut her hair and wrapped him in it. Then she put him in the water and he floated out to sea. What she did not realise was that Maui was still alive.

Tangaroa had noticed Maui bobbing up and down in the sea and sent seaweed to wrap Maui in. The seaweed would protect Maui. The seaweed carried maui to his grandfather Tama-nui-ki-te-rangi. During the trip he sent a few of his other children to help Maui along the way. Maui then reached his grandfather.”What have you brought me? “ asked Tama-nui-ki-te-rangi. He saw Maui through the thick hair and then Maui sang the song “ taku kurapounamu taku motoi kahurangi o taha, o roto, o pae, o waho e…” He knew then that it was Taranga’s son and his grandson.

He grew older and got taught waiata, haka, taiaha and whakapapa. He also learnt how to control his powers. Every night as he went to sleep his grandfather would sing the song to him. “Taku kurapounamu taku motoi kahurangi o taha, o roto, o pae, o waho e…” One day he wanted to go and see his family. He asked his grandfather where he would find them. He got told all about his birth and were he would find them. Then he went off to the place he would find them. He traveled far and long until he came to the place where he would find his whanau. He saw a flicker of fire and heard some voices. When he got closer he recognised the song they were singing. Then he knew, it was his four brothers. He joined them and also tried to explain he was their brothers. They did not believe it was him until he showed he could do the haka, and showed his powers to turn into a bird. That's when they noticed it was Maui. They were all shocked.

They all asked him questions but Maui just kept on saying that he was their brother. During all of that, Taranga was watching. She had no idea who this man was, but she had a weird feeling in her puku. Maui walked up to her and Taranga asked “ Who are you?” 

Maui song the song again, “taku kurapounamu taku motoi kahurangi o taha, o roto, o pae, o waho e…” That's when Taranga realised it was Maui. She give him a big hug. Taranga told Maui how she had always thought he was dead. All of Maui’s brothers welcomed him. Now Maui is known as Maui-tikitiki-a-Taranga.

Learning Fun with Miss Eglinton

Miss E's Medal Chart

For the last two weeks, we have been lucky to be learning with the wonderful candidate teacher, Miss Eglinton. She is in the first year of her teacher training and has been making a fantastic contribution to the learning and culture of Room 6.

What will happen next?

Miss Eglinton been reading the class the mysterious and adventurous novel, "The Ghosts of Young Nick's Head" by Sue Copsey. Room 6 love it! One group of students have been creating their own retells of the chapter, "Plunged into Darkness". They have been focusing on adding interesting details through choosing emotive language. Check out Ben's example here!


We have also really enjoyed our Commonwealth Games challenges. Look at the awesome medal chart that Miss Eglinton created! Can you guess which country each flag belongs to?

That Old Washing Machine

Text type: Recount. Purpose: Entertain

WALT use different sentence starters

I know I can do this when:

• My sentences start with different words
• Capital letters to start sentences and for proper nouns
• Some short, sharp sentences
• Some complex sentences
• Speech marks for talking / new line for each talker (Taylor)
• Group sentences into paragraphs (Maia)

My key words: skip, garage, washing machine

At last it looked like my skip was arriving. A big truck started to reverse down the driveway towards our garage. On the back of the truck was a mechanical crane device and an enormous shiny orange skip. In order to get the skip off the truck, the driver had to hop out and operate the crane. “Where do you want it?” asked the driver.

“Just in front of the basketball hoop will be great,” I replied. “Do you think I will have room to get my car out?”

“Yeah, sweet as,” the driver reassured me, as he walked towards the controls on the back of his truck. To me, it was like he was operating a spaceship, the way he was using multiple buttons, pulleys and shafts to control the crane. To him, it was as easy as pie. Yet there was no doubt of the skill involved in getting the three cubic metre bin to sail through the air and land on the perfect spot. Did I mention how narrow my driveway is?

I thanked him for such a great job and just like that, the truck was gone. Left on the driveway was this huge orange skip. It was just waiting to be filled. Timidly, I opened the garage. It was a rubbish dump sprinkled with precious items such as my bike. Staring back at me was the stubborn broken washing machine. There was a battle looming. I strode up to it. Then, very slowly, I moved it side to side, closer to the skip. Eventually, it was time to lift the beast. With all my might I heaved it into the air. I had lifted it close to the ledge of the skip, but it still wasn't high enough. For a split second, I thought the weight might be too much and I would collapse in a heap. As though I had transformed into a weightlifter, I gave one last determined effort and lifted the washing machine up above the skip. Bang! It crashed down into the skip with a satisfying metallic clunk.

There would be smaller battles to come, as I filled the skip. I shouldn't really mention the panic that seized me into action, as the driver reversed down the driveway to pick up the skip and I hadn't quite cleared the garage yet. Nevermind the stuck TV, when I just had to pull it so hard that the power cord ripped out of the set. The driver had it right when he said “that’ll do it”. Forget about the extra rubbish that might have found a temporary home in the skip - I managed to clear it up anyway. Yes, the real story was that I fought that old washing machine and I won.

Sheena Cameron's Sentence Opener Ladder

Exploding Coke Bottle

Writing Purpose: To Entertain

WALT use our senses to describe

• (see, hear, smell, feel, taste)
• different sentence starters
• some short sentences

Swoosh! I can feel the Coke going up my nose. Jaidyn Russell,

Brayden: Boom! I opened the coke lid, Squirt!, The coke shot right up my nostrils like someone shot a shotgun up my nostrils.

“Pop! Boom! Ouch!” as the coke shot up my nostrils. Tracey L

Elijah. The brown liquid covered my face leaving behind a sticky mess.

Matilda  

OH Coke. I ran to it, he undid the lid and the fizzy coke rocketed out of the bottle up into my nostril.

EZRA MORTON

Ka pow! A gush of coke sprayed into my face! I peeped a look. Splash! Coke went into my eye. “Yeow!” I shouted leaping up, dancing around the room holding my eye!

George    Boom the bottle explodes! It looks like whiskers.

Rosie:  Boom! It felt like I had fizzy whiskers. Then it felt like I had fizzy boogers.

TRAYLAN  Pop! pop! oh no is going to pop!

Jacob BOOM!! The fizzing coke went right up John’s nose.

Crystal = BOOM!  Suddenly I can feel the fizzy spraying up my nose.

Shake! Shake! Shake! Pop! The coke lid flew away and the coke went straight up my nose and everywhere else it looked like cat whiskers. (TAYLOR)

It burst on my face like cat whiskers.

Mary Arkell

Class word bank

JAMES ¬ BOOM!! AGH! The coke fires up at me like a volcano.

Kellyanne: I could taste the fizzed coke in my mouth and I could smell the coke fizzing bubbles.

Boom! The coke give me a big mustache. Liam

Boom!!!! I could see a coke bottle on the table in front of me  then suddenly coke burst out like a firework. By Brooklyn

Kyra  I opened the lid and out it sprayed up my nostrils, and then came out like fireworks.

Maia: Not only would it be a coke rocket, it would be a rocket to space!

I smell coke burning through my nostrils at 102 kilometres an hour. Ben!

NASA: Come on I can do the IMPOSSIBLE.                              

Jared: It shot up like a rocket.

KAPOW! Suddenly coke exploded all over my face and the place.  BY JULIUS MONKEY

Cameron: I unscrewed the lid of the coke bottle. The coke shot out of the bottle.

Imagine if a coke bottle blew up in front of you. Boom! Fizz! (Zach)

As he opened the coke bottle suddenly POP! He went back as he got fright from the lid flying across the room. (Kayla)

I could pull it off still unknowing that it was going to go everywhere. Then it exploded in my face. Yum, but it still hurt.(Madison)

Enjoyment of the Race

The 5 senses

I was fluctuating between total calm anticipation and that physical impulse for a nervous toilet stop. Everywhere around me were confident cyclists wearing helmets, lycra and coloured tags. Most of the green tags were disappearing. I was green. The commentator kept announcing new numbers and the colour they belonged to. Not my colour, not my number. The chatter merged into one continuous sound and then she appeared... Nicky, running strong and upright. I cheered her on and smiled at the echoing support from my colleagues to the left. 

Quickly, I carried the bike forward and rammed my left leg up against the gates. I called Nicky's name and she ran towards me. In a brief panic, she transferred the electronic bracelet to my ankle. I would find out later that Nicky attached my leg to the metal post at first and that my hairy ankle had almost made her vomit!

With urgency, I ran my bike towards the marshals and got on my seat as soon as I could. My legs eased into the rotations as I breathed in the sea air. Faint smells of barbecue dissipated into the distance. My bike cut through the bumpy road, propelled by those racing wheels Stephen had added and my newly discovered enjoyment of the race. I was free. Completely alive in the moment.

The Parkvale crew. Where's Nicky?

Imaginary Cycling

We are learning about safe cycling. These pictures are not examples of safe cycling! Instead, we are using them to motivate some creative writing. Which one is your favourite? Why?

Sky Rider

My First Training Wheels

Your Turn First

Here are some entertaining sentences:

I get pushed on my way! “AHHHH you idiots!” I scream. Ben

I closed my eyes and found that my tummy was feeling a little sick. It felt as if the food and stuff inside it was floating amongst the gravity. Hemani

‘I want to ride my bike, mum,’ I said. ‘Well... ride off a cliff then,’ she replied. ‘Ok, I will then’. Zach

My tummy feels weird like its got butterflies flying around. Imaan

I waited to go to the toilet.4 minutes later. Hurry up! Hurry up!!! Come out. NOOOOO! Shivom

I hope I don’t fall down and get hurt. Emma

This is awesome! Nikitah J.

“Hey,” I say to Elijah, “Do you want to play? ‘I dare you’.” 5 minutes later... Tyrone

I knew I shouldn't of put the helium in my tyres. But there was 10 bucks on the line. Do you know how many cool things you can buy with 10 bucks? Not many, but still it’s 10 bucks. Elijah

Adrenalin rushing. I've just invented the new  MAGIC flying bike!!! Let’s GO! Zeb

“Ahhhhhhh!" I can't believe what I am going to do! Am I crazy? Nakita

I am getting there, I am trying my best to get there. Tracey

Wow this is amazing but there is one problem, how am I going to get down? Bree

I feel like I am going 100 miles per hour! Not. Hannah

I finally reach the top of the ramp, 1km above the ground, adrenaline was pumping, my heart couldn't stop beating. Inderpreet

So I take some deep breaths and say “hasta la vista, baby” as I push off. Marcus

It’s now or never! Cameron